Post by levy120 on Jan 25, 2011 16:20:35 GMT -5
I stumbled over this Oneshot
AGAIN!
No here's the situation:
It has no name
But that is the least of my worries actually
This is one of those Oneshots that tried to grow into a bigfic with a lot of OCs in it, but I resisted to keep it small and canon.
Now the problem is that there is a certain character in it who is importan for information transmission.
In the Bigfic/Samiel Version he was a huzzler/thief with a sickness who hadn't long to live and was therefore found by the owl and talked into helping him. So they went to the Fa household and the huzzler tried to genuinly buy something with stolen gold, using words that the owl practically put into his mouth.
In the oneshot version he just stands there for Fa Zhou to elaborate what's goi- wait he doesn't even do that anymore, he just sends Mulan to the temple to have ol' Granny explain and exactly that's what's happened.
Mr. Huzzler with a lot of gold is sent away (so he can keep the money and buy some food dadum) and lost all threatening presense to him because frankly there is not much to him anymore.
I tried to include him in a failed attempt at just stealing what he tried to get, being found by Granny and Chased away, but I am really Really NOT HAPPY with this kind of version.
The oneshot is too random and the Samiel one is just over the top.
And I don't want this to be random, because the basic idea of it is supposed to be deep and heartwarming, there is no place for randomness and misplaced gags :/
I've been struggling with this thing since MARCH 2010 - it's a shame how I can take THIS LONG for a simple Oneshot.
Oh drats <.<
Any ideas or questions on the current situation? I might even feel movitated enough to put the current (Onshot Version) online to be taken apart.
I really like the idea of this and want to put it on fanfiction.net - but in the state it is currently in, it simply does not appear "worthy", since fanfiction.net is the collection of the best stuff I have to offer.
AGAIN!
No here's the situation:
It has no name
But that is the least of my worries actually
This is one of those Oneshots that tried to grow into a bigfic with a lot of OCs in it, but I resisted to keep it small and canon.
Now the problem is that there is a certain character in it who is importan for information transmission.
In the Bigfic/Samiel Version he was a huzzler/thief with a sickness who hadn't long to live and was therefore found by the owl and talked into helping him. So they went to the Fa household and the huzzler tried to genuinly buy something with stolen gold, using words that the owl practically put into his mouth.
In the oneshot version he just stands there for Fa Zhou to elaborate what's goi- wait he doesn't even do that anymore, he just sends Mulan to the temple to have ol' Granny explain and exactly that's what's happened.
Mr. Huzzler with a lot of gold is sent away (so he can keep the money and buy some food dadum) and lost all threatening presense to him because frankly there is not much to him anymore.
I tried to include him in a failed attempt at just stealing what he tried to get, being found by Granny and Chased away, but I am really Really NOT HAPPY with this kind of version.
The oneshot is too random and the Samiel one is just over the top.
And I don't want this to be random, because the basic idea of it is supposed to be deep and heartwarming, there is no place for randomness and misplaced gags :/
I've been struggling with this thing since MARCH 2010 - it's a shame how I can take THIS LONG for a simple Oneshot.
Oh drats <.<
Any ideas or questions on the current situation? I might even feel movitated enough to put the current (Onshot Version) online to be taken apart.
I really like the idea of this and want to put it on fanfiction.net - but in the state it is currently in, it simply does not appear "worthy", since fanfiction.net is the collection of the best stuff I have to offer.